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The day that you died is coming near again,
i wish you were here,
i wish things were the way they were then,

But death being death has no heart and no soul,
And i'm really sorry you never reached your goal,
Every time i breath, and everything i do,
I will always,be missing you.

You were so young, so wild and free,
Running through the forest without a care,
then came the day death took you from me,
at your funeral all i could do was stare,
im sorry for your life really wasnt fair,

now your gone, and its been so long,
when you left, part of me went along,
but you will always live on in my heart,
and even death can't keep us apart,

years of adventure will never be forgotten,
you will live in everything i do, and every battle i've foughten,
it's been four years,
since i've shed the tears
because i know i will see you again.


Alexias-Ashley
anaversery of best friends death........
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yarryanotak Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a very emotional piece, and hopefully as time goes on it will get better for you.
I understand this poem isn’t big on correct grammar; frankly I like this style for this poem for some reason.
You did however have some mistakes with spelling:

"years of adventure will never be forgoten"
._. You forgot one "t" in "forgoten"

"The day that you died is coming near agian,"
It's "again" not "agian" even though that word looks pretty to me. x_x

"Everytime i breath, and everything i do,"
Every time is two words, not one.

"Running through the forest with out a care"
Without is one word, not two.

"im sorry for you life really wasnt fair,"
"you" should be "your"

"ill will always,.... be missing you."
Either you can keep "ill" or "i will", you don't want two "will"s in that line.

"now your gone, and its been so long,"
Ok, wrong "your" it's you're, but for this it would "youre"

Now that line and this line: "its been four years,"
Have "its" in them. That is the wrong form of the word, so I'd advice to use the exception with just "its" to add an apostrophe for it making it "it's." You can do this or not, it's up to you. But, I just think you should use the exception for this and the line: "but you'll always live on in my heart," uses an apostrophe in "you'll" you should take that out. ._.

I like that it has grammar errors, for me it gives off innocence and that's the feeling I get with this poem. Not to mention this also give off sorrow. I think this was very nice.
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Alexias-Ashley Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
LOL!! i suck at spelling -___-"
thanx for all the corrections though, i really aprectiated :D
i'll fix it as soon as possible.
the reason it was so messed up is because i did it last minuet and didnt take my time on it cause my mom threatend to cancel the internet.... lol.
thnx for taking the time to help :D :D :D :D

best wishes.
Alexias-Ashley
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:iconyarryanotak:
yarryanotak Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's ok. I type to fast and then forget to put in some letters in words if that makes you feel any better. ^-^"

No problem. :D
It makes sense. I do that to with a threat like that. xD

It was nothing. ^^
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PurpleAnimeArtFreak Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww, that's beautiful. It's been almost a year since my best friend passed away too, I understand the sorrow. :iconsqueezehugplz:
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Alexias-Ashley Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you so much, its been four years for me but it feels like it happend yesterday.
im really sorry about you're friend, life is really unfair sometimes,
but god would never put you through something you cant handle, i guess.
best wishes.
Alexias-Ashley
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PurpleAnimeArtFreak Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
best wishes to you too. i hope things will cheer up for you
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ChibiterasuOkamiden Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm sorry...
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Alexias-Ashley Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
its ok, thank you
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